Honestly, aside from just saying "Oh this is cool!" -- the layout is well done, it reads like a graphic novel and the amount of detail in each frame just makes each part stand out on it's own as an individual piece, which isn't an easy task. I saw Avann's page first, and then came to this one because of her linky~ so I guess I was reading it backwards (so pro of me) and if you both have the time, it would be absolutely amazing if the rest of the story were fleshed out. Amazing job!
happy birthday, you friggin aussie. <3